Poem: Too Sweet – 02/01/19

 She is gone, she has left, she’s departed.
 I made it this way;
 she’s better off having undergone this process.
 Because she was too bright bubblegummy 
 and saccharine sweetness, far too much of it,
 one taste and her candy flavour would explode
 inside your mouth, snap, crackling, popping. 
 It’s easy to hide behind something which obscures,
 but what occurs when you want to stand up,
 and show you’re you,
 and this is yours?
 The tartness mixed with the sugar of a lemon drop
 makes me wince, I screw up my face,
 the bitter sweetness of reality 
 slamming into what is truth,
 to reveal, it is never too late.

  © 2020 Lauren M. Hancock. All rights reserved.

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 are copyrighted 2019-2020 by Lauren M. Hancock 
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  1. I like your paintings, I do. Or perhaps they’re charcoal, or even crayon. It’s a good look. It works. I used to be a sketch artist before my vision got so bad. I aspired to be the next Alberto Varga. Didn’t happen. unfortunately. I almost went to the Kansas City Art Institute. But my vision being a birth defect, I was never sure how long it would last. Had I known it would have lasted as long as it has, I may have gone, but I do not see well enough to read or write without some type of digital aid. Nevertheless, I seem to have a gift for the Arts. I don’t write as much as I used to, but I do still play piano & guitar, I just don’t have a piano to throw over my shoulder and take to the park.

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    1. What did you most love to sketch? I’m also a musician, although I don’t play nearly as much as I used to. I’m planning to undertake some formal classes in poetry this year. I’ve never studied it, and I think it would be nice to learn more about it. Thanks you for your help about the tag cloud.

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      1. I’m a huge fan of pin-up art. eg–the Varga girl. But any of that 40s 50s cheesecake stuff I love it, and so I sketched women. Mostly. I was good though. I really was. Unfortunately I don’t have anything that I ever drew; i gave most of it away.

        I don’t know how much formal education in poetry I have ever had except to read anything I could get my hands on. I do have favorite poets from classic to the contemporary.

        I do have tons of notes though, somewhere on this machine.

        I would say, however, because i neglected to do this at the beginning, is study forms; such as sonnets, sestinas, ballads ect. The Aubade is my favorite. It’s the opposite of a nocturne, but many of them are more disaplined, like the sestina, sonnet, ghazel. But find ones you like and learn to write in them, it will serve you well, even with free-style.

        It shows that you can write in a disciplined format and therefore are a more rounded writer. In my opinion. I’m always impressed by people who can write well in forms because I’m so lousy at it.

        What type of instrument do you play? I have no formal music education except for 7 years of piano lessons when I was a kid. After that I simply trained my ear. I probably play my guitar, a Jeff Beck signature Strat, from 3 to 6 hours a day. If I can. I love to play music I really do in the end it’s what I’m most passionate about.

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        1. I’m imagining that you liked to draw the type of images that on your blog? The photos used are really beautiful, and it would be lovely have been lovely to see some of your work if you still had any. My favourite poets at the moment are: Courtney Peppernell, Lang Leav, Laurie Halse Anderson (her new book of free verse, Shout), Michael Faudet, and my all time favourite, Sylvia Plath. I’m rereading The Bell Jar at the moment.

          I have been strongly encouraged to learn and write in poem forms and though I’m procrastinating a little, I understand your rationale behind writing and suggesting that I learn them. It just seems a really daunting task, especially as my writing doesn’t have any set form to adhere to.

          I play the violin. Do you play classical or contemporary? Do you have any of your guitar playing online or is it just a passion you have to keep close to you?

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  2. We should be tossing emails. I never talk this much online. I barely speak on my own posts or do social media, something very bad happened to a friend of mine once online so I just tend to hide in plain sight. I’m a bit of an extroverted int5rovert.

    I absolutely love violin. I’ve always wanted to learn to play. Or the cello. I wouldn’t say that I play classical music, but I enjoy all musics. I like playing to contemporary jazz, like David Sanborn, or blues music. I like to think I could learn the violin. I understand scales, and usually if I know how to tune a string instrument I can play it.

    My art was similar to the images on my blog. Go for the tease but it has to be tasteful.

    I couldn’t begin to list all my favorite poets, you might thumb through my litbblog, The Vale of Soul-Making. All three of my blogs on WordPress are linked.

    Start out with a simple form, like the Sonnet. You can easily find the rules online. Then work your way up to more difficult forms. Like say the Sestina. I still haven’t successfully written a Sestina. Now ad Aubade or a Nocturne are simple enough. No real rules except that a Nocturne is an evening love song, and an Aubade is a poem of two lovers parting in the morning. I do have a short Aubade on my poetry blog. I love all Aubades simply because of what they are. There is something both beautiful & bittersweet about them.

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    1. Yes, email would probably be better. Did you want to send your details through the Contact Me page so I could reach you? I’m sorry to hear about your friend having something bad happen him or her. I’ll have a look at your other blog and will check out the sonnet rules too.

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